You're supposed to move into a rented flat next week, but you won't be able to due to unforeseen problems. Write a letter to the property manager. In your letter 1) Explain the situation 2) Describe your problems 3) Tell him/her when you think you can move in Write at least 150 words.

Dear Mr. Paterson, I am writing to tell you that, I am unable to move to your apartment on time, as we planned. Please, allow me to elaborate on the situation in detail. I work as a project manager in an IT consulting firm. I have organized an important contract for my firm with one Chinese tech giant, but something went wrong. My boss has organized a business trip for me to solve the problem in Beijing with the client on the spot.
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, I will be in China for almost the whole next week, and I can not transport my personal belongings to a new flat on Monday. I am returning from the trip on Friday and going to hire a transportation company to help me on Saturday. I am still interested in the apartment
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and am ready to do an advance payment if necessary. Please, get in touch with me to discuss details. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Vasilii Rasskazov
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Task Achievement
Try to provide more specific details about how you plan to solve the problem and confirm your move-in date.
Coherence & Cohesion
Connecting paragraphs and ideas more smoothly could enhance the flow of your letter even further.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your letter is well-structured with clear paragraphs.
Task Achievement
You effectively informed the property manager about your delay, explained the reasons, and suggested a new move-in date.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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