you recently attended a training course for your job,your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. write a letter to your employer,in your letter remind your employer what the course was about explain why the course was useful to you in your work suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues.

Dear Mr Wang: Thanks arranged the training for me about the rules of
hotel
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. I learned some useful skills in
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lessons.I learned how to great
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service
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the
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customers
who
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from different cities,
moreover
,I
also
learned something about
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in the hotel,most importantly,please don't bring any flammable
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in the hotel,we watched several videos about fire
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.I think it is very crucial knowledge during my
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,certainly,I already know
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safely
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problems in the new staff training,but the lesson can always
reminde
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remind
reminded
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me
don't
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forget that important section in the area. I think some new
staffs
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could pass
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lessons ,because the new staff training finished
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last
week.But it is a good opportunity for some old
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,so,they maybe
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do some right things for our customers. Thanks again,
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unforfettable
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unforgettable
training for me, and if you have any
quesions
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,please call me. Yours,
sincelery
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sincerely
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Spelling and Grammar
Remember to review spelling and grammar to ensure your message is clear. For example, 'great' should be 'greet', and 'safely' should be 'safety'.
Structure
You might consider structuring your paragraphs more clearly, each focused on a single idea, to enhance readability.
Details and Examples
To make your writing even more effective, you could include more detailed examples of how the training will be applied in your work.
Task Achievement
You effectively communicated the purpose of the training and its relevance to your work, which shows good understanding and task achievement.
Tone
Your letter has a friendly and respectful tone, appropriate for communication with your employer.
Consideration of Colleagues
You successfully suggested why the training might not be suitable for some colleagues, showing a thoughtful consideration of the team's needs.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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